Urgent! Can you help me with my college admission essay@!

<p>With my application due on December 1st, I had to rush and complete my essay. Since it was written in less than 45 minutes, I need help to make it into something presentable.</p>

<p>Could you help me spot any:</p>

<p>-Grammar errors
-Style Errors
_am I missing anything critical? Should I remove any superfluous sentences or add some more in?
-Content revision
-Rate it overall
-What impact did it have on you when you read it?
-Should I reword anything?</p>

<p>Thank you. PM me for a link to my essay,</p>