USC Essay...HELP!

<p>Hey everyone!</p>

<p>Just writing my first draft for my USC essay....
The prompt:
Thomas Edison failed many times before successfully inventing the modern electric light bulb. He said, "If I find 10,000 ways something won't work, I haven't failed. I am not discouraged, because every wrong attempt discarded is another step forward." Reflect on a challenge you overcame through persistence.</p>

<p>This is only my first draft, but any help is greatly appreciated, please PM if you would like to help! Thanks!</p>