<p>I know it's really hard to read, and that too may have altered the score. </p>
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<p>This is riddled with grammatical errors.
The writing section is an absolute farce.</p>
<p>First sentence. Don't shift from using "one" to "they." Easy grammar mistake to spot. And its always on the writing section. YOu should know better.</p>
<p>lots of grammatical errors...</p>
<p>Your insights and analysis are juvenile and your grammatical errors make me cringe. Also, your essay is far too short and your examples are weak. If you had elaborated more upon the examples and analyzed them on a more significant plane, you would have earned a much higher score.</p>
<p>Personally, I would have given you a 3 for your spelling of "universitys" alone.</p>
<p>Can someone tell me why I didn't get a 12? I thought my essay was both insightful and grammatically complex. I hate SAT....</p>
<p>btw, I ended up with a 200W :)</p>
<p>Lol, why would you do something like that?</p>
<p>Well you see, schools in Florida don't care about the writing part. I already half attempted the writing part and got a 560 lolol. I figured that I would give my brain and hand a break this last time. Since my scores will be superscored anyway, it doesn't matter one bit.</p>
<p>You need to support the thesis better.</p>
<p>2nd paragraph: "Had he not abandoned his fellow Americans, he would be hailed as one of the greatest generals today." How do you know? You never backed that statement up. Plus, your thesis is that "if one is able to maintain a strict loyalty, then they will be one of the honest people in this world." How is that a thesis? If you remain loyal, you're an honest person. Well, duh! What's your point? And what's Benedict Arnold got to do with this?</p>
<p>3rd paragraph doesn't talk about loyalty or your thesis. You're insinuating here that his loyalty helped make him great, not "one of the honest people in this world." You need to change your thesis.</p>
<p>And at the end, you say, "Ultimately, staying loyal is a great asset to achieve what you want and you will receive it in time." What you said about Benedict Arnold has nothing to do with this.</p>
<p>Okay, now what does that have to do with "if one is able to maintain a strict loyalty, then they will be one of the honest people in this world." </p>
<p>So it looks like you really don't have a thesis at all, or you were unsure of it. When you're writing, you need to think, "Okay, what's my answer to this prompt that I'm given?" You state it outright. Then you think, "Okay, why do I think this? What pieces of evidence do I have to support my point?" Then you state the evidence. Finally, you ask, "So what if universities were going to be named after Benedict Arnold? So what if Gandhi was loyal and did a bunch of stuff? So what?" You have to tie in your evidence and show how it relates to your point. How does your evidence support your point? If you do a good job answering these questions, you'll probably get a 10, at least.</p>
<p>Pistolen:
Your second paragraph was a bit off...</p>
<p>I thought the cute kirby would ensure an 800</p>
<p>Ankur...i also think you did not right enough...I write about the same amount in length and have gotten 8's from princeton review graders and ETS graders...
During one of princetonreviews free strategy session, they told me to fill up the 2 pages as much as possbile, even if your essay isn't as strong...because somehow u get a better grade</p>
<p>Ok, thanks guys.</p>
<p>dude are you ****ing retarded? My essay rocked yours and i got an 8. First of all, you need to devise your time... 3 minutes preparation, 20 minutes writing, and 2 minutes revising. And your essay needs to have 4-5 paragraphs, preferably 5. Furthermore, you need to have 3 facets of concrete evidence. When you write your introduction, you state the 3 subjects/evidence that your going to use, and end the intro with your thesis. And when writing the essay you have to choose quickly what your answer is to the prompt. (yes or no) ..no contemplating!!! just pick a side!!. Now, with the body paragraphs you just use one example for each paragraph, then for the conclusion you just restate your thesis.</p>
<p>i agree w/ the comments other posters have made-i don't think it's worthy of an 8 (but, obviously, that's just my opinion)</p>
<p>i spent 10 mins brainstorming and 15 mins writing</p>
<p>my arms are ripped from writing, its like a sport almost</p>
<p>LOL</p>
<p>7 .</p>
<p>Could you at least elaborate? I don't get what's so hard about that.</p>
<p>Don't forget they grade it "holistically". So you can get a decent score with minor grammar mistrakes. I got two 8's when i took the test twice. Not happy b/c i thought i did better the second time.</p>
