evaluate my essay

<p>alright
i keep writing these essays
and don have any clue what im supposed to be getting
someone judge my essay so that i will change my writing method if it's crap
ill pm u both prompt and the essay</p>

<p>Hi. 홍찬.
We are Super Koreans ! ! !</p>

<p>yea sure send me the essay and i'll see how i can help you</p>

<p>i pmed u
haha</p>

<p>i'd probably give it an 8-9...
reasons for this are
a) the examples you provided, although extremely solid and relevant, werent detailed enough..it doesnt provide enough insight, i think
b) as you mentioned it yourself, the conclusion was really shaky..it seemed like you were waffling alot...avoid it!</p>

<p>other than that, it was a good read..with a few little tweaks you can reach double figures....</p>

<p>yay
that is a relief
i thought it was crappy
thx</p>