First, the student body. Everyone is super motivated. They spend their time productively, and meaningfully. They can be opening a restaurant in their dorm room like Jonah Reider, or running their startups with their ambitious friends. These are the things that I don’t get at my college. I want a friend who can motivate me and help me to do something that can have an impact on the community. But I have a hard time finding someone like this.
Second, the faculty. I mean great schools attract great professors because all professors love motivated and hardworking students. I love my professors at my college. They are very patient explaining to me the class material that I am confused about. But what amazes me is just how close Columbia professors are to their student. My tour guide told me his professor invited him his house to enjoy a breakfast together, and when he was searching for an internship, his professor gladly invited him to his architecture firm. Who doesn’t dream to have a professor like this?
Third, the resources. First is Columbia’s location. It sits at the heart of NYC. NYC is known for its startup culture but also its world-famous museums, of which the Society of Illustrator is my favorite. Second is Columbia’s labs and an almost endless list of courses student can take. I have always dreamed to take the E4603 robotics algorithm course taught Professor Ciocarlie and apply my learning in the Robotic Manipulation and Mobility Lab.
Columbia have the student body, faculty and resources for me to achieve my goals and give back to the community. It is an once-in-a-lifetime education that I will value very much.
@davidnumber5 - This essay is fraught with grammatical errors. Many of your sentences are not even complete sentences. In fact, your opening “sentence” is not a sentence-First, the student body. This is not a sentence! Your last paragraph begins with an error (Columbia have the student body…) The correct wording is Columbia has the student body… (has, not have!). I am assuming that English is not your first language, however, you must still use grammatically correct sentences in a college essay. Please have someone at your current school (a teacher? the writing center?) review this for grammar. I’m sorry if this was harsh, but you can not submit this as is.
I agree on all the above… several grammatical errors, and a HUGE error in posting it online.
That said, it seems your essay is kind of superficial. "Everyone is super motivated. They spend their time productively, and meaningfully. . "?? How do you know that? How many people did you meet? And they never ever just hang out? I don’t know, I’m pretty academically minded, but the picture you paint doesn’t sound like much fun.
Yet you want a friend who will motivate you… are you sure you belong with all these other internally motivated people?
(Not being harsh, just trying to dig a little deeper.)
OK, forget the essay. Pretend I’ve just moved to NYC from abroad, and you want to show off Columbia. What would you show me? What would you use as an example to show me just what a fine school it is?
Why Columbia as opposed to NYU? Or Fordham? What is it about Columbia in particular that speaks to you?