What's another way to say..

College Essays
1

<p>"I was afraid to mess up, and, if I did, I was hard on myself."</p>

<p>I don't know, but it sounds kinda weird to me. Are there any other ways to phrase this? Thanks!</p>

2

<p>I feared making mistakes, which made situations tough. As I made mistakes, I grew more harsh on myself.</p>

3

<p>I was always afraid of making a mistake. And when I made one, I was hard on myself.</p>

4

<p>Try removing the second and third comma and reading it out loud.</p>

5

<p>I was afraid to mess up; I was hard on myself whenever I messed up. I think it sounds fine the way it is. It gets the message across and that’s what’s important.</p>