Who wants to critique my common app essay?

<p>I've spend some time on it but I'm concerned about the change in POV written in the conclusion. I'll send it as an e-mail/PM to anyone interested</p>

<p>i"ll read it and i’m online now, so you"ll get feedback asap</p>

<p>You can send it my way and I will take a look.</p>

<p>Any more takers?</p>