<p>I just finished the first draft of my Why Penn essay. My intro and conclusion are both very humorous and creative, yet I’m a little bit skeptical about the actual content of the essay. I feel maybe it’s a bit too straight forward?</p>
<p>I start out by saying that going into my college visits, I had an unrealistic set of expectations for a school. How I was satisfied when a college met half those expectations, until I came upon Penn.</p>
<p>Then I talk about my attraction to the business program, Wharton, because of its’ interdisciplinary nature. I talk about why I have an interest in business, etc, while I still have deep passions for science and history.</p>
<p>Then I talk give a little anecdote about how I knew that Wharton and Penn set itself apart from other schools I visited.</p>
<p>Then, I give a brief comment about how excited I was about research opportunities after reading about one of the Wharton students in the Penn brochure.</p>
<p>Finally, I talk about the environment and atmoshpere during my visit, and how that sealed the deal for me as I already come from a large and diverse school and I thrived in that environment. I talked about the city, the isolated campus, etc. And I ended it on a very creative note.</p>
<p>Do you guys think my essay is too straight-forward and unoriginal. My other one, the “pg. 217” essay is definitely way more personal and has a imaginative flair to it, but I’m a bit afraid that maybe they put more emphasis on this one?</p>
<p>Looks fine to me. I think the Why Penn essay should try to mix in as much of YOU as possible. If you just talk about the school, it won't show how that school is good for you. For every paragraph you write, personalize it.</p>
<p>I think the Why Penn essay is much more important (217 can be for any essay at any school). It's important to make it personal but it's also important to mention specifics (and not quote brochures) to show that you did your research and that you are serious about your interest in Penn and Wharton.</p>
<p>How about turning your ENTIRE "why penn" essay into a "why wharton" essay, (is this a good idea?) and perhaps some speculations about business plans after wharton to show that I will indeed benefit and prosper from the experience?</p>
<p>I would suggest against that, as it is a why Penn essay. You are applying to the University of Pennsylvania first and formost, the Wharton School the division of the university, not the other way around. Remember, not all of your education is in the classroom (sorry about the cliche, but remember, you have to live here for four years as part of te Penn community, not just taking Wharton classes all day.) But, if you fail to mention why Wharton is good for you, that is probably a bad thing. Thus your ideas should work, but be sure to mention Penn as well!</p>
<p>even though i think it is good
i think it lacks originality. Everyone can write something about that
i think something original and creative is needed</p>
<p>well what i did for my why penn essay was take the central theme of ECs and made sure to point out the specific examples of penn that iw ant to take advantage of to help me excel in them</p>