Will someone please help me with my college essay?

<p>I started my essay and I know it need to be more developed, but I don't know which parts to elaborate on. It also needs proofread. I was wondering if anybody would be willing to help me out with this? Please email me at <a href="mailto:alyssapoo93@yahoo.com">alyssapoo93@yahoo.com</a></p>

<p>Thanks :)</p>