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<p>Quote: Many people believe that our government should do more to solve our problems. After all, how can one individual create more jobs or make roads safer or improve the schools or help to provide any of the other benefits that we have come to enjoy? And yet expecting that the governmentrather than individualsshould always come up with the solution to society's ills may have made us less self-reliant, undermining our independence and self-sufficiency."</p>
<p>Question: Should people take more responsibility for solving problems that affect their communities or the nation in general?</p>
<p>Essay:</p>
<pre><code> Sure! People should take more responsibility in solving problems that affect their communities. As motivational and self-improvement books proclaims, taking more responsibility to solve the problems in the society is the rational thing to do rather than relying on other things and complaining that the aid is not sufficient and the goals are not reached.
History all around the world shows us that the government alone can't help the whole society. Did Martin Luther King Jr. depended on the government to end discrimination against the blacks? The Egyptian people were dependent on their government to solve the problems, and from one glimpse at any news channel my questions raises: Did they do the right thing? German people during the Great Depression depended on Hitler and the Nazi party to provide them aid and solve famine and poverty problems. Did that ended well? The simple answer to all these questions is "No!" with capital N. People can't have the naïve assumption that the government is a superhero with powers to end all the bad things in the world. If people don't work and don't attempt to solve their own problems, then why to expect others to do more difficult attempts to solve others life?
Moreover, Singapore will be a good example to join the ones mentioned above. When Singapore was separated from Malaysia. Poverty and famine were skyrocking the whole country. Children used to shower in the streets, adults used to spit on the floors, and people used to live the filthiest living life a person can imagine. The government like any thid world country regulated some rules. But it's the people who were willing to work on themselves and improve. They didn't want to be labeled as one of the Asians many third world countries. People started to watch their actions and try to solve themselves. Today Singapore is a country with wealth and the people in general are happy to live their. (Side note: Singapore don't have any good resources to improve; it doesn't have good oil resources, the whether is not that good for agriculture, and it was destroyed in the past that tourists wouldn't even consider it when they make their planes!)
Finally, people can fix any problem they want if they work hard to do it. Bill gates slept hungry for many nights, but he didn't only rely on the government to bring the magic wand and make him a billionaire. He worked hard and achieved his dream, and opened a place that created many jobs in the world which people are going to be proud of belonging to them. To put in nutshell, if people did the work they will get the prize. If they didn't, we must be careful of a potential rising of the Fourth Reich!
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