Would any parents read my commonapp?

<p>Hey y'all! I got deferred from my EA school but that's alright! I'm focusing on putting my best foot forward for my other apps. I was examining my CA essay and not sure if it's quite portraying the traits I like/might sound forced. I thought since parents have more experience, through life and their childrens' processes, y'all would have some better insight. An adult who doesn't know me is also a good reader to have, I think. Let me know and I can PM. Anywho, thanks in advance!</p>

<p>Happy to read it for you…</p>

<p>Thanks! Anyone else?</p>

<p>Sure, send it over. Let me know what the prompt is as well and perhaps what schools you are looking at. </p>

<p>I’d be happy to read it too. </p>

<p>I’ve sent you some comments. You need to make some substantive changes but the bones are good. Good luck!</p>