Would anyone be willing to look at my Richmond essay?

Hi, I’m a senior in high school just about ready to apply to Richmond. I really love the school, and it is definitely in my top 3 schools that I am applying to. I only have a 31 ACT, though, so I am definitely no shoo-in for admission, which is why I want to make sure that my essay is so good, giving me any edge that I can for admission.

I wrote about the prompt that said “Tell us about Spiders.” I wrote about how, growing up, I’ve always disliked spiders because I’m not outdoorsy, and then talked about how I began to hate spiders after my mom got a staph infection from a spider bite. But then I transitioned into how I would be willing to learn to love the spider if it meant I could be a Richmond spider, talking about why I liked the school so much.

If anyone would be willing to look at it and give me any feedback, I’d appreciate it so much!
Thanks!!

I can take a look at it (current sophomore at UR)! PM me.