Would anyone like to give feedback for my UC prompt #2 essay?

<p>I can PM to anyone who is willing to edit. I'm also really worried about cliche and my wording. Respond to the thread, maybe give me your email address so I can send the document file.</p>

<p>PM it over, I will read.</p>

<p>PM, I will read it :)</p>

<p>Would anyone else be interested?</p>

<p>Sure. Hit us with it</p>

<p>I’m interested as well</p>

<p>PM me, I’ll give you feedback :)</p>

<p>pm me, i’ll read it</p>

<p>i’ll read it too!</p>

<p>I’d be happy to give you some feedback. What aspect do you think is the most cliche. A lot of the time all you have to do is personalize it more to more directly state how it affected you to make it seem less general and therefore less cookie-cutter. Shoot me an e-mail at <a href=“mailto:NKunkel@ucsd.edu”>NKunkel@ucsd.edu</a> or PM me</p>