Would someone mind reading and possibly commenting on my essay?

Applying to College
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<p>I am not a good essay writer... I don't have a great way with words, but I'm trying. I am applying to:</p>

<p>Bentley
Binghamton University
Boston College
Boston U
Colgate U
Fordham U
UMD, College Park
NYU
Providence
UScranton
Syracuse
Villanova</p>

<p>White male, 95 GPA, 1300/1930 SATs. Good Recs and excellent ECs. I am thinking that my essay will be hurting my chances at most colleges, if it has any effect on my chances at all. =(</p>

<p>If anyone is interested, just say so! Thanks.</p>

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<p>no one at all?</p>

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<p>i will, sure!</p>

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<p>I'd love to!</p>

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<p>hey i would love to read your essay</p>