1st essay - Can someone critque/edit/help me out

<p>bump … …</p>

<p>hey, i can help u out
P M it to me, ill edit it/ give suggestions</p>

<p>thanks a lot people . But not every1 has replied back . </p>

<p>So bump</p>

<p>I will not read/edit/critique an essay that has not been proofread. And if I see two incomplete sentences in the first two paragraph (or perhaps first paragraph alone, I forgot) and a typo in the first paragraph it tells me you have not done your fair share of the work. Plain and simple.</p>

<p>Pm me your essays, I’ll critique it =]</p>

<p>PM you essay please. I will critique it</p>

<p>PM me. I can help.</p>