A quick blurb about "Why"

College Essays
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<p>I wrote this in 5 minutes (Must be under 1000 characters). It's either amazing or horrendous, and I'm not sure which. What do you think?</p>

<p>Why are you drawn to the academic fields you indicated in the Anticipated Degree and Academic Interest questions above?</p>

<p>Once, when I was young, I asked my grandfather a question. We were in the Publix near my grandparents’ house picking up necessities; canned pumpkin, spice cake mix, corn, typical items. Our bodies wove through the aisles. “How does the grocery store know how much to make their food cost?” he didn’t hear me in the midst of hurrying. I didn’t know how supply and demand worked. “What about how much to buy? Doesn’t the grocery store lose money if they buy too much?” this time I made sure to be acknowledged. “Well,” he said, “they have someone deciding that for them as their job. Some people study it.” “What about what kind of food to sell? How come the store never has the brand of chips that we like? Isn’t that a useful thing to know how to do? I want to learn?” I really did want to learn. I still do. My grandpa stopped walking for a moment and paused, about to reveal how I could learn how society ticks. “Well,” he responded “that would be economics.” And so it was decided.</p>

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<p>Since its a short answer, I don’t think they want you to be too unique. I don’t think this one experience a possible 10 years ago is very strong to support your answer. While it may have sparked your interest in economics at first, I think you may want to talk about your current interests or how you are involved in economics(Business EC’s, stuff like that) now and how it intrigues you. It was a great try and I like the story. Maybe you can put that as an intro for a longer essay, and follow up with how that one experience influenced you now.</p>

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<p>It’s well written, but it doesn’t tell enough about YOU. If in a hit or miss situation, I think it would be a miss. Sorry to be harsh, but you are welcoming honesty.</p>

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<p>This sounds like the first paragraph of a two paragraph essay, where the second paragraph would launch into a description of your current interest–the stocks you follow, the related ECs, the investment books you read. I think it would be lovely in that context.</p>

<p>Unfortunately, in an essay as limited as this, it’s risky to spend too much time on a romantic childhood story. Consider condensing the story so you have time to include more recent, relevant information.</p>