Academic Appeal Letter - Please give feedback ASAP

<p>This past year has been a challenge for me and I have recently been academically dismissed from my school. However I was given a chance to appeal and I have until Monday to send it. I wanted to ask you guys what you think of my letter. All criticism is welcome, do not hesitate to let me know if I need to revise thoroughly. </p>

<p>Dear xxxxxxx,
My name is xxxxxxx, and I am writing this letter to you as an appeal on behalf of my poor academic performance this past Fall semester. I take full responsibility for all my grades and collegiate progress. Despite having an unsatisfactory academic performance, I do not mean to make excuses, but I would like to inform you with the reasons as to why my GPA has become low.
Throughout the course of my first two years in college, I was encountered with several challenges academically, and personally. During freshman year, I was excited to continue my education at xxxxxxxxx. However, just after the first semester started, I had two deaths in the family; my Uncle lost a battle with cancer and my Grandfather had passed away. I was also told my older brother was diagnosed with psychosis. The disheartening news struck me with a depression, and it became increasingly hard to cope with as time passed.
Since I was able to finish the first semester with decent grades, I did not think it was necessary to receive professional help for my battle with depression, as I took it to be a temporary feeling of grief at the time; this was a poor decision that would only make the battle harder. As I went into the second semester, I lost a sense of urgency and became overwhelmed with the 15 credit hours I registered late for due to an outstanding out-of-state balance. It significantly dropped my GPA putting me on academic probation.
When I was given the email telling me I had been put on probation before summer, my sense of urgency was rejuvenated. In spite of the bad news, I was still determined to redeem myself for the Fall semester. However, as soon as classes began in September, my mother became very ill and had to be hospitalized for a while. I tried to keep focus on my studies, but the devastation took a toll on my battle of depression.
This caused me to make a poor, costly decision yet again. In attempt to cope with my battle, I decided to go off campus one weekend and become intoxicated. I was cited for an underage by campus police and ended up having to go to the hospital as well for alcohol poisoning. It was a spur of the moment choice that was completely out of my character, and I am currently paying for my repercussions.<br>
In the following months, I disciplined myself to the best of my ability. I exhausted every opportunity I could to make progress by joining the AIM program and meeting with a staff member every other week, setting appointments with tutors in subjects I had trouble with, applying new study methods, and managing my time better.
My grades held up until the near end of the semester, when I became anxious of exams, low test scores, and a few missed assignments that dropped my grades in two classes, Cultural Geography and Applied Statistics. Lack of communication with the professors and professional counseling applied a great amount of pressure on me to average the required GPA, and in the end, those two classes dropped my GPA significantly. I thought I would be able to handle all the burdens myself, but I was clearly wrong.
Please understand that my low GPA does not imply that I am a bad student. I have good intentions, but this year, I have made bad choices which begotten bad results. Now that a new semester as well as a completely new calendar year is about to begin, I am starting a new chapter and I am leaving the past behind. I cannot promise you my personal struggles will discontinue, but my reactions and decisions towards them will.
If I am approved of this appeal, this semester I have devised a plan to ensure my academic status is recovered. I will:
• schedule four classes again until I can prove I am able to handle more credit hours.
• go to the counseling center to receive professional assistance with depression.
• reinforce study methods by evaluating what is most effective to improve test scores
• diligently communicate with my professors on a consistent basis by email and appointment
• remain in the AIM program to assess my study habits and discipline
• construct this plan with a strategy and time efficiency by negotiating it with advisor</p>

<p>Thank you for your time and consideration. I sincerely hope I am reinstated for the Spring semester.</p>

<p>how did the appeal go?</p>

<p>It was declined :(</p>