An eccentric hobby, please critique!

College Essays
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<p>Haha, not the hobby itself but my commonapp essay on it. I'm looking for criticism in regards to its structure, flow, cohesion, all of that - and also if you think the admission officers will be able to see a bit more of who I am from it. It's still a rough-ish draft, so I am very flexible if you have any suggestions. Thanks!</p>

<p>BTW - I'm applying top Universities/LACs so keep that in mind.</p>

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<p>I'll read it for you...pm.</p>

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<p>go ahead and PM me as well.</p>

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<p>pm it overr</p>

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<p>you can pm it to me if you'd like</p>

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<p>sounds cool lemme see</p>

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<p>Thanks, any other takers?</p>

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<p>I'll take a gander. PM.</p>

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<p>im just curious what this hobby is :p</p>

<p>pm</p>

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<p>same as above ^ :D feel free to pm me :)</p>

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<p>i'll read it PM me.</p>

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<p>you can pm me!</p>

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<p>PM me too....im bored as hell</p>

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<p>same here... sounds intriguing :] pm me any time</p>

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<p>i'll read/critique</p>