<p>If anyone would be willing to read it that would be most awesome!! </p>
<p>We can do exchanges if you'd like! </p>
<p>I'm applying to UCB, UCLA, UCSD, and UCSB btw.</p>
<p>I am a parent of Senior son. You can PM me. He has already written his essays.</p>
<p>Hi, If i send you mine, will you be willing to read it tragicxeyes?
ill read yours as well! just pm it to me. (you can send both essays and ill send both of mine or just one is fine).</p>
<p>I’ll pm both of you! thanks for the help 
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<p>@hometown, I only have one finished (horrible, I know) but I’ll read both of yours if you want? Or if you want to just send me the second one since I’m sending you the second one that’s fine too!</p>
<p>Hi!
would you like for me to pm you the feedback or just post it out here for everyone to see?</p>
<p>you could post out here I suppose. It doesn’t matter…</p>
<p>ok well i thought id ask so others can see my feedback and agree/disagree but then you might not like that. just in case you know :P</p>
<p>anyways here it is
here is the feedback to your essay.
I think the way you wrote your essay, which sounds very “smart”(to me anyways) is a good reflection on how you went from a “blas</p>
<p>Thank for reading it and critiquing it. I’ve updated it, would you be so kind as to re-read it?</p>
<p>i think it is much better, its alot more personal.
"As a result I received a “B” in all of my math classes, a feat I once though impossible. "
there is a typo on though.</p>
<p>but dont worry about the technical stuff. i think you should work on the concept of the essay.
The essay has to be about you and what kind of person you are.</p>
<p>Also : thanks for your feedback- it really helped especially the sociology part lol</p>
<p>ps: what are tragic eyes? =) just curious</p>
<p>haha oops. I’ll fix the typo later.</p>
<p>and idk what tragic eyes look like, they’re lyrics ;)</p>
<p>edit: would you mind reading the first prompt as well? I just finished it and its not great. I’m not sure how to fix it :p</p>
<p>ill read it tommrow but now im going to sleep!!!</p>