Any feedback for Common App "Topic of your choice" essay?

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<p>Would anyone be interested in giving me some CONSTRUCTIVE feedback on my common app essay? I chose topic of your choice, and I wrote about a kind of odd topic... well, it's really not even a topic I suppose, I kind of just started to think, and whatever came to my mind got put onto paper. It's also kind of personal, not just "I went on a mission trip and realized how lucky I am" or "I had a relative die once and it made me appreciate life" but rather my thoughts and feelings about certain things that are important to me. I hope it's kind of unique, but I'm not an expert...</p>

<p>Thank you in advance!</p>

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<p>Pretty please?!</p>

<p>I need to submit some of these apps by the end of this week, so any feedback would be IMMENSELY appreciated!!</p>

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<p>bump?</p>

<p>10 char</p>

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<p>I’ll read yours, but can you give me some advice on mine as well?</p>

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<p>I’ll give it a read. PM me.</p>

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<p>I’ll read yours! I’ve read a few, and people have liked my feedback. </p>

<p>Also, I would love it if you could take a quick look at mine. It’s finally getting to the stage where I’m not too ashamed to show it to anyone.</p>