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<p>Question:</p>

<p>A mistakenly cynical view of human behavior holds that people are primarily driven by selfish motives: the desire for wealth, for power, or for fame. Yet history gives us many examples of individuals who have sacrificed their own welfare for a cause or a principle that they regarded as more important than their own lives. Conscience - that powerful inner voice that tells us what is right and what is wrong - can be a more compelling force than money, power, or fame.</p>

<p>Is conscience a more powerful motivator than money, fame, or power?</p>

<p>Essay:</p>

<p>Conscience is a concept people have defined as the force preventing them from hurting others. While ostensibly some may argue that conscience does not allow them to take any benefit, in reality every good behavior has a selfish reason behind it. Two characters from literature serve as compelling examples of this fact.</p>

<p>Sometimes, people take care of others to attract someone by their side. This is the case of Jay Gatsby, who throws incredibly beautiful parties to entertain foreigners, hoping that one of them will eventually be attended by his lost love, Daisy. When he sees she does not appear, he appeals to her cousin and persuades him in bringing her. After accomplishing his goal, Gatsby does not organize any party anymore. Thus, Gatsby looks for gaining something by giving the others the opportunity to have fun. No conscience is involved.</p>

<p>In other circumstances, people want to form a good impression by doing something nice. When Mr Darcy from 'Pride and Prejudice' went to prevent Lydia's marriage to Mr Wicham, he was only looking for Elisabeth to notice. He took the matter in his own hands and did not let anyone else intervene. When he eventually managed in bringing Lydia and Wicham home, he persuaded Wicham in staying together with his wife. Impressed by his behavior, Elisabeth accepted Darcy's new proposal to marry him. Darcy too had a selfish reason beyond helping a foreigner. </p>

<p>As both Franklin Scott Fitzgerald and Jane Austen have depicted in their novels, people never give away something without expecting a reward. Though sometimes it does not involve money, nor fame, nor power, every apparently selfless person looks for some sort of benefit.</p>

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<p>I wrote this essay, so for examples I choose To Kill A Mockingbird, Civil Rights Movement with LBJ and personal example about visiting my dying grandma instead of interning with a huge corporation. </p>

<p>My suggestions are these:</p>

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<li><p>Use a variety of examples: literary, historical, personal, etc. What you did was just limit yourself to just two writers. Your essay was really short and since you had 2 examples you have to really develop it, if you had a third it'd be okay. But length MATTERS.</p></li>
<li><p>You have to clearly state your thesis, don't write some writers/people/etc. believe write I BELIEVE THAT... Clarity is key a strong intro/conclusion will get you a 12. </p></li>
<li><p>Do Not Qualify which you did, state your point this comes back to clarity whether you agree/disagree, don't qualify its a bad bad idea. I've personally done it in the past and I got hammered (7). Be very clear and take a stand. </p></li>
<li><p>Make a profound point in your essay something related like morals should always be considered when we make decisions that shape our lives, or talk about the danger about pursuing money/fame/etc. This will leave the reader with a good feeling and only help your chances of getting that 12. </p></li>
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<p>Score: 8</p>

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<p>Question:</p>

<p>The old saying 'be careful what you wish for' may be an appropriate warning. The drive to achieve a particular goal can dangerously narrow one's perspective and encourage the fantasy that success in one endeavor will solve all of the life's difficulties. In fact, success can sometimes have unexpected consequences. Those who propel themselves toward the achievement of one goal often find that their lives are worse once 'success' is achieved that they were before.</p>

<p>Can success be disastrous?</p>

<p>Essay:</p>

<p>Success does not always bring along pure happiness. While ostensibly some people believe accomplishing a dream gives them eternal satisfaction, in reality many of them are unprepared to handle their own success and move on. Three episodes from literature or media serve as compelling examples of this fact.</p>

<p>Sometimes, success may not be as perfect as one imagined, as Jay Gatsby was to discover. He waited for years to meet the woman he loved again. He used his wealth and his relationships as a mean of finding Daisy, only to find out that she was married. Moreover, she eventually revealed her true love for her husband, despite his adulterism. This fact eventually led to Gatsby's death. Had he not accomplished his dream, of reuniting with Daisy, he might have had a happier and longer existence, even if it was nourished by an illusion. In his case, success proved to be fatal.</p>

<p>Other times, success may have foreseeable consequences. this is what happened to Maccaulay Culkin, the kid who became very rich practically overnight. Coming from a poor family, he accepted to play in some movies to earn money. At first, everything seemed to be perfect, as their living conditions gradually improved because of young Maccalulay's earnings. However, as the family was becoming more and more wealthy, its members started to fight for financial matters. Eventually, Maccaulay's parents got divorced an during the rest of his childhood and adolescence he was a lonely, depressed, rich star. Success was the only cause of his poor condition.</p>

<p>There are also circumstances when early success brings a false certainty for later success. After young Romanian gymnast Alexandra Marinescu won the Junior European Championships, she was certain that results at senior level were as easy as picking a flower. As a consequence, she lost her discipline in training, while involving in activities forbidden for a gymnast. When she became a senior, however, those good results refused to appear. Nervous because of that, Alexandra pushed her training beyond limit, injuring herself and leaving the gym forever. Had she been less successful early in her career, she could probably have won an Olympic title.</p>

<p>As Jay Gatsby, Maccaulay Culkin and Alexandra Marinescu have shown, success often has two faces. Often , it is the unpleasant face the one that lasts longer. Only with proper caution or psychological strength, does this unpleasant face leave no consequences.</p>

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<p>Anyone????</p>

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<p>Same thing that I said before, but it has more length so I'd give it a 9.</p>

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<p>Question:</p>

<p>The people we call heroes do not usually start out as unusual. Often they are ordinary people subject to ordinary human weaknesses - fear, doubt, and self-interest. In fact, they live ordinary lives until they distinguish themselves by having to deal with an injustice or a difficult situation. Only then, when they must respond in thought and in action to an extraordinary challenge, do people begin to know their strengths and weaknesses.</p>

<p>Do People learn who they are only when they are forced into action?</p>

<p>Essay:</p>

<p>In my experience, I have reached the conclusion that people do not discover their abilities until they have to use them. While ostensibly some believe a talent is obvious as soon as one is born, in reality such a talent may be wasted if it is not applied. My unexpected participation in a Math contest serves as a compelling example of this fact.</p>

<p>Until third grade, I hated Math from the bottom of my soul. I found solving Math problems extremely boring because they always seemed to follow the same pattern. Instead, I was an avid reader. As soon as I learned to read, I used to read a book whenever I had a little time to spare. I had no doubt at the moment that literature was to be my future.</p>

<p>Things changed drastically, however, one day when my teacher asked me to go with him to a Math contest. I did not assume I was to participate, because he failed to tell me so. When eventually I discovered my teacher's plan, it was too late to back up. I had no other choice but stay.</p>

<p>Solving those problems proved to be a much harder challenge than I had ever imagined. They were anything but boring. Even if at first I knew nothing, I had to come up with ideas to imagine an unusual solution. At the end of the test, I was vexed to discover that I had enjoyed the process enormously. I went home with a completely new attitude towards Math. Ever since, I solved a huge amount of difficult Math problems on a regular basis. I still like literature, but I now know I was not born for it.</p>

<p>Had i not participated in that contest, I would have never discovered my innate ability for scientific matters. It would have remained a talent I had no interest in developing. Thanks to my teacher, however, who practically forced me to solve some problems in an unusual circumstance, I now know what I am able to do. In the same manner, there has to be a first experience for everyone to find out who they are. unfortunately, there are many youngsters nowadays who never have the opportunity to meet with their talents. Maybe society should create more opportunities for children to experiment as many fields as possible. This is the only way to discover the leaders of tomorrow.</p>

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<p>Your introduction doesn't catch my attention.
7/12</p>