Any one want to help my essay since it sucks

<p>Its for the Yale supplement please help</p>

<p>sure, PM it over. Accepted SCEA, so I'm not in your pool</p>

<p>Well, I may be applying, so youll have to trust me. I can help you if you want to (I have my own ideas, dont worry)</p>

<p>I could, but then again, I got deferred, so maybe I'm not the best proofreader.</p>

<p>I would happily look it over. (For what it's worth, I was also accepted early.)</p>

<p>Alright pm'd thanks for the help</p>

<p>PM me (YALIE '12er)</p>

<p>PM to me. SCEA admit and bored :D</p>

<p>I feel so thrown out, lol. I was deferred too. You should ask, "would I be considered over someone who had her legs cut and still made the same scores as i did?" Look at it from the perspective of the movie THE 21. I was lucky (sounds silly) but my life has been HELL because of financial restraint. Should money, that people spend and throw away, keep me from getting the best? Answer that in your essay.</p>

<p>I'll look at it. I was accepted scea so I won't be in your pool either.</p>

<p>Thanks everyone for the help, so far Ive gotten mixed criticism from everyone and im trying to put it all together</p>

<p>PM it over if you want, im bored haha (SCEA accepted)</p>