anyone kindly grade my essay or give any comments

<p>This is one of the Oct prompts
Do books, newspapers, and other media focus too much on bad news? </p>

<p>any gradings (out of 12) or comments are welcome. </p>

<p>Truth sometimes may be undesirable to face; however, we must deal with problems when they arise rather than intentionally cover them. Golding’s allegorical novel, Lord of the Flies, explores into human’s innate evilness in an attempt to provoke the society’s reflection on the imperfections of human nature and civilization in general while, the revelation of the Enron Scandal, awakens a realization that our economic system is still far from being perfect. </p>

<p>Reading without taste, one might interpret Lord of the Flies as a mere work of criticism. But the novel contains far more meanings. When referring to the history of WWII, we immediately recognize that Ralph’s group represents civilization, which eventually crumbles under the threat of evil force led by Jack, who in many aspects resembles figures such as Hilter in history. The murder of Simon marks the downfall of humanity and also evokes the miserable memory of the Holocaust, a tragedy that showed no respect for innocent lives. Nonetheless, the novel’s portrayal of this nasty bleakness is not meant to merely render a sense of pessimism, but to raise our awareness of such possible failures. Lord of the Files thus should be read with a purpose of introspection; only then can we recognize the constructive elements of the book and the author’s underlying purpose, namely, to examine humanity and social and political systems so as to prevent tragedies from repeating. </p>

<p>Moving the discussion from the onerous topic of human nature to business, a world advancing at an unprecedented pace, we unfortunately also spot flaws. The Enron Scandal is not only a malpractice of business activity or of the accounting system, but also a mischief of our current economy, in which government regulations are needed more than ever. The revelation of this fraud from different aspects allowed for much progress rather than caused chaos in the business world. The Sarbanes-Oxley Act, immediately legislated after the disaster, proved our ability to amend improper endeavors. A Chinese proverb, “it is never late to repair your sheepfold before you lose all your sheep,” aptly describes this situation. </p>

<p>The way we interpret and treat bad news determines what we gain from it. Pretending that problems do not exist does not solve them. As the two examples above illustrate, the only way to lead our society ahead is to unveil the complete picture of reality, whether it be pleasant or dreadful, and then improve ourselves. Literature and modern media are two powerful means that keep us alarmed of the defects lie within us and our civilization as long as they adhere to the principle of truthfulness.</p>

<p>wow, thats really good especially since you only have 25 mins.</p>

<p>id be surprised if you didnt get a 12.</p>

<p>my problem is that, as a non-native speaker and being in a Chinese school, i can’t write that fast. this essay took me more than 30 mins</p>

<p>Hey! Don’t sweat it. We’re all in the same boat.
But you should try to handwrite it out, cause it feels totally different when you’re typing an essay VS. handwriting it.</p>

<p>yah, i handwrote and it took more than 30mins… if i typed, it would be much faster. I think i’ll have to practice my calligraphy… but does this essay fit in the topic? coz the essay question asks about “bad news”, i am not that sure whether i have gone too far…</p>

<p>i is probably a 10 score essay.
GOOD work!!!</p>