Anyone up for critiquing an essay??

<p>I have finally gotten around to writing my first rough draft of one of my essays. I would appreciate honest and valuable advice on what i need to work on. The directions say that it should be about 250 words but my word count is up to 373. Is that really bad? I have no idea how to shorten it down though. below is the topic and again i would really appreciate any help.</p>

<p>"We tend to spend our time doing the things we know we do well -running because we're good runners, or painting because we're talented artists. Tell us about a time when you tried something for which you had no talent. How did it go?"</p>

<p>yeah I'd love to read it. PM it over.</p>

<p>Thanks! anyone else? pretty please? =)</p>