Anyone willing to give me some feedback for essay?

Transfer Students
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<p>it is the "why" essay for the university of chicago, if you would like to see a rough draft of it please notify me and i will send it to you via pm, it maybe paranoia, but stems from a past academic experience that was bad, so please if i send it to you do not plagiarize. I will not be transferring til 2012 so it is just a very rough draft but any comments would be deeply appreciated.</p>

<p>thanks</p>

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<p>fyi, it’s barely a page long so its a quick read</p>

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<p>I submitted all my apps last night, I can give you a quick honest opinion.</p>