<p>^haha you must be “drunk” posting because you’re on the English thread lol</p>
<p>How do I edit or delete?</p>
<p>I’m sorry. I didn’t know I wasn’t allowed to talk about it. My teacher told me she received the green booklets already so I thought it was okay.</p>
<p>okay it’s been 48 hours. </p>
<p>For the argumentative essay, I used Ron Howard as an example: I said he was faced with economic hardship as a child and that experience shaped him into a great movie director. Turns out Howard’s father was an actor and Howard was a child actor on the Andy Griffith Show; he didn’t face economic hardship. Anyway, will the graders take off points because it is false information or do they just care whether it formed a cogent argument. Although young people might no know who Howard is or of his background, the readers–who are older and probably watched Andh Griffith–will know who he is and know that he didn’t come from a poor family. Gahh!</p>
<p>^^ I’m not sure, but I think they can’t mark you down for getting your facts wrong, like on the SAT.</p>
<p>But yeah, It’s been 48 hours and the questions are online. </p>
<p>Here’s what I wrote for the FRQs…</p>
<p>Synthesis – I argued for space exploration, cause it seemed like they wanted us to do the opposite. I talked about how the money spent on space exploration is small compared to what the government spends on other things like the stimulus and how my local economy is somewhat dependent on it. Then I went on to talk about how space exploration fuels and necessitates international cooperation and unity, citing the International Space Station, Star Wars (lolol, because the planets all had just one government?), and the Space Race (had the US and Russia worked together, it would have been faster). Lastly, I argued that the environment is degrading rapidly and if we want humans to survive in the future we should look in to living elsewhere. I think I sounded a little idealistic, but otherwise it went well.</p>
<p>Rhetorical Analysis – This was seriously rough. I said the author used parallelism to show that environmentalist’s and anti-environmentalists use basically the same arguments against each other, and fundamentally, their debate is about economics and governmental structure – not the environment. I also talked about his use of rhetorical appeals, and mentioned colloquialism.</p>
<p>Argumentative – Mine was basically an SAT essay. I used Frederick Douglas, Their Eyes were Watching God, and The Giver as my examples.</p>
<p>My essays for 1 and 3 were ok, 2 sucked.</p>
<p>1 - I talked about FINANCIAL and SAFETY concerns. Only those two. I showed how they were VERY IMPORTANT for normal life so why shouldn’t that extend into space? (Especially, in terms of safety, if we’re not sure what we’ll encounter out there). About 4 pages.</p>
<p>3 - I talked about ADOLF HITLER and LIZ MURRAY. Adolf I did a great 1-1.5 page analysis of how the adversity in Germany (and himself as well when he was jailed) helped him to rise to power. Liz Murray was the 2nd example I came up with 5 minutes remaining on the test. 
I only read 1 paragraph of her online so I had to BS a page about her. =[</p>
<p>2 - I talked about how the author just focused on SIMPLIFYING their arguments.</p>
<p>Hmm, can someone tell me if i totally F’ed up on the essay questions?</p>
<p>1 - I said we should have space exploration because it challenges the youth, which is where a civilization starts (to that extent). And that only $0.06 of the federal dollar are going towards space exploration which was $0.13 under National Defense. I went on to say, “If we wanted to start a society in space, wouldn’t it make sense that a national defense would need less of a budget than they have right now?” and used one of the sources to back that up. (3 pages)</p>
<p>2 - I DID NOT WRITE ABOUT SATIRE!!! The prompt said “satire” and now I’m freaking out that i may have gotten a 2 or 3 because i didn’t use it. I said the author used colloquialism and indirect discourse to show that both the environmentalists and anti-environmentalists reached a stalemate in their arguments and had to resort to derogatory terms to basically say they were better. (1.6 pages)</p>
<p>3 - I wrote an anecdote in which i went through some hardships at home, and as a result my character is refined and more ambitious. I also said how Wile E. Coyote goes through adversity and isn’t prosperous but still keeps trying which shows that it creates a strong character. (1.6 pages)</p>
<p>Any thoughts on how my essay’s were? I’m seriously freaking out.</p>
<p>^zaboda, i don’t think it’s too bad you didn’t mention satire, because they already gave that to you in the prompt.</p>
<p>SYNTHESIS: i like completely denounced space travel! the most important factor i mentioned was international relations (evidence=cold war & space race, north korea’s recent launch of satellite), safety, and environmental impact.</p>
<p>RHETORICAL ANALYSIS: this one really threw me off, i’d never written an essay where both the “x & y” were already given, so i basically just specified HOW he uses satire and reiterated the purpose.</p>
<p>ARGUMENTATIVE: probably too many cliche examples…but i think i did bring up some unique angles, mentioning how adversity is only beneficial when you allow it to be, etc…couldn’t help mentioning the stereotypical college essay prompt of “describe a time in your life when you overcame adversity…”</p>
<p>Synthesis- My 3 issues were conservation/not raping space like we have the Earth, safety, and Unity.</p>
<p>Analysis- wrote how the author used Horatian Satire to reveal his middle of the road/non-extremist position and how he felt that extremists of any sort were stupid (in a nutshell, a lot better sounding ha). Don’t remember what I used for the People’s First Critic but for the environmentalist one of my major points was how he said “land development uber alles” in an allusion to Nazi Germany and thus subtly calling the anti-enviros fascists and went on from there…</p>
<p>Argumentative- I defended and used the story of “Gifted Hands” (but I couldn’t remember the main characters name! ugh) and John Lester the Red Sox pitcher who overcame cancer and came back to pitch a no hitter. Ended with a quote from Lance Armstrong</p>
<p>Nobody else I know used the “land development Uber Alles” thing! Which surprised me, I thought that was a clear thing that would be everyone would write about. I do know one person who used it as “the author used it to show that the environmentalists knew other languages and were more cultured and knew the world better”. But I say that’s BS. Saying ____ Uber Alles is always used in satire as a pejorative and reference to the Nazis. Since the author was trying disparage the 2 groups I thought that fit in well.</p>
<p>For the synthesis, were we supposed to take a side? I definitely did not; I stayed neutral and just presented the facts that we should be concerned with when venturing into space. I didn’t say whether we actually SHOULD or SHOULDN’T explore space.</p>
<p>how bad is it if i said, for the rhetorical analysis, that the people-first critics’ goals were to disparage the environmentalists and that the environmentalists’ goals were to dismiss the people-first critics’ disparaging comments?? </p>
<p>also, for my last two essays, my intorductions were one sentence long. i was too frustrated! how many points will i get docked off?</p>
<p>I think i had an unusual approach to 3, went against it with affirmative action.</p>
<p>rk33 – I used the “uber alles” thing, too.</p>
<p>^ I saw the uber alles thing but I couldn’t figure out how to fit it into my analysis so I just skipped it…</p>
<p>The prompt asked which is the most important issue that should be considered in decision-making regarding space exploration. How can you be neutral? To answer the question, you must have concluded a certain issue to be the most important and supported it, no?</p>
<p>"I think i had an unusual approach to 3, went against it with affirmative action. "</p>
<p>Yeah, I thought everyone would end up defending the argumentative essay, so I qualified it just to be different <__< I used Solace of Open Spaces to show that adversity does develop character, and I used Lord of the Flies to show that too much adversity that you’re not capable of handling will ruin your character.</p>
<p>@ zaboda - This is kind of off topic but I can’t reply to the PM you sent me because your inbox is full. delete some messages so I could answer your question =]</p>
<p>I was thinking of talking about Dwyane Wade in the 06 finals when the heat were down 0-2 and down by 12 with 6 minutes left in game 3, and Wade took over and won. I figured that wouldn’t be very “english-like,” so I stuck with history and literature lol.</p>
<p>On my third essay, I defended the position. I had a whole body paragraph using the example of last year’s NBA playoffs. I showed that the fact that the Celtics had to struggle to reach the Finals and faced adversity, ended up preparing them and mentally toughening them up to allow them to defeat the Lakers (who most expected would win after cruising to the Finals).</p>
<p>Probably not a great topic to write about in an AP English essay but I was exhausted from a night of little sleep the day before, an hour of multiple choice, and writing 2 other essays, so it was all I could think of at the time.</p>
<p>And the fact that I’m a hardcore Laker fan made it really hard for me to write that paragraph as well.</p>
<p>OK I got my green packet back today from my teacher. I am going to post the directions and the exact prompt of the synthesis essay.</p>
<p>Directions: The following prompt is based on the accompanying eight sources. The question requires you to synthesize a variety of sources into a coherent, well-written essay. When you synthesize sources, you refer to them to develop your position and cite them accurately. Your argument should be central; the sources should support the argument. Avoid merely summarizing sources. Remember to attribute both direct and indirect references.</p>
<p>Intro:
Explorers and tales of explorations tend to capture the human imagination. However, such explorations have financial and ethical consequences. Space exploration is no exception.</p>
<p>Prompt:
Read the following sources (including the introductory information) carefully. Then, in an essay that synthesizes at least three of the sources, develop a position about what issues should be considered most important in making decisions about space exploration.</p>
<p>It’s settled…the prompt says TAKE A POSITION. The directions say ARGUE and DON’T SUMMARIZE SOURCES.</p>
<p>1 - I wrote about how the most important factor was tolerance of other ideas, working together…basically become citizens of earth as opposed to citizens of independent countries and how we had to approach space exploration cautiously and slowly. I related space exploration to manifest destiny and how it’s man’s innate desire to explore the unknown. </p>
<p>2 - I didn’t use any rhetorical strategies…totally blanked out. I said that by stereotyping liberals as extreme environmentalists and conservatives as anti-environmentalists, the two parties are unable to reach any conclusions with the fundamental issues that define liberals and conservatives. It was totally a work of BS.</p>
<p>3 - I said how when adverse situations arise, one group prospers at the expense of another group… How it doesn’t always shape one’s character positively. My examples were Dutch colonisation in Indonesia, Indonesian Economic Crisis of the 1990s (to show corruption as a way of bringing about a demise in character…the rich prosper and the poor stay poor, have no way to retaliate), European colonisation in the New World, and how the Native Americans were decimated and unable to overcome adversity. Once again, a total work of BS.</p>