Application Essay Help Please

<p>Why did you choose to apply to UCF?</p>

<pre><code> The University of Central Florida has been recognized by Princeton Review as one of the Top 50 for “Best Colleges, Best Value” and the most engaged university in Florida by the UCF Staff. This school is always ‘Under Construction Forever’ and is looking for ways to better prepare its students for the future. I chose to apply to the University of Central Florida because I feel that it’s more than a school, it’s a way to develop myself. While I went on my first college tour in the second year of community college, the University of Central Florida has always stood out above the rest. The students, faculty, and staff are wonderful. The campus is very organized and is not hard to find anything. I’ve always wanted to move out to Orlando, not because of the theme parks, but because of the diverse backgrounds the city has. Learning other peoples’ cultures will help me develop more as a person.

By being located in a large, popular city, the University of Central Florida offers internships and job opportunities to help students become successful. The University of Central Florida has partnerships with employers nationwide, as well as locally, including: Disney, Universal Studios, Darden and many others. Another thing that I like about the University of Central Florida is the small student to faculty ratio. This makes the learning experience a lot easier in the event I have a question or concern. Originally, Florida State University was my choice for Business Management; however, it appears to me that there are more advantages that made me lean toward the University of Central Florida. One of the business courses at Florida State had roughly 800 students, which would make it very difficult to learn. UCF stands for Opportunity and I feel that this is an opportunity I can’t pass up.
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<p>What qualities or unique characteristics do you possess that would allow you to contribute to the UCF community?</p>

<pre><code>I believe that if somebody asks the people who know me best, they will describe me as a hardworking and goal-oriented type of person. Throughout my life, I have always stayed true to myself. When I was 15 years old, I got my first job at a local Winn-Dixie. I was reminded time and time again that I didn’t need a job. I told my family that since dad passed away a few years back, that this job will make me a stronger person. I didn’t look at a paycheck as independence. I looked it at as a way to help my mom support the household, by paying a portion of the bills.
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<p>I have set numerous goals in life and let no one get in my way of achieving them. Whether it’s at school or work, I’m the type of person that will make sure that everything that was assigned to me is complete. If I don’t complete everything, I feel as if I didn’t accomplish a thing. </p>

<pre><code>I think the qualities and characteristics I posses would allow me to contribute to the University of Central Florida community. I live by a quote from Les Brown: “Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you’ll land among the stars”. I will try to show my fellow students to never give up that you could do anything you put your mind to. Losing my father when I was 11 years old was tough, but he would want me to do better and make a difference.
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<p>Why did you choose to apply to UCF?</p>

<p>I’m applying to the University of Central Florida because it’s the perfect place for me to better myself. While I went on my first college tour in the second year of community college, the University of Central Florida has always stood out above the rest. The students, faculty, and staff are wonderful. The campus is very organized and is not hard to find anything. I’ve always wanted to move out to Orlando, not because of the theme parks, but because of the diverse backgrounds the city has. Learning other peoples’ cultures will help me develop more as a person and create a more diverse learning experience. </p>

<p>By being located in a large, popular city, the University of Central Florida offers internships and job opportunities to help students become successful. I hope to take advantage of this and gain real life work experience while earning my Business Management degree. The University of Central Florida also has partnerships with employers nationwide, as well as locally, including: Disney, Universal Studios, Darden and many others. Another thing that I like about the University of Central Florida is the small student to faculty ratio. This makes the learning experience a lot easier in the event I have a question or concern. </p>

<p>What qualities or unique characteristics do you possess that would allow you to contribute to the UCF community?</p>

<p>Someone who knows me well would say that I’m a hardworking and goal-oriented type of person. When I was 15 years old, I got my first job at a local Winn-Dixie. My mom consistently reminded me that I didn’t need a job. I told my family that since dad passed away a few years back, that this job will make me a stronger person by letting me take on some of the responsibilities he had while he was alive. I didn’t look at a paycheck as independence. I looked it at as a way to help my mom support the household, by paying a portion of the bills. </p>

<p>I have set a number of personal and academic goals in life. The number one goal in my life right now is to get my Business Management Degree. Then, I would like to land a career as an Assistant Manager for Walmart. There’s one quote by Dr. David M. Burns that I strongly believe in: “Aim for success, not perfection. Never give up your right to be wrong, because then you will lose the ability to learn new things and move forward with your life”. I am the type of person that is not afraid of failing. I feel that by failing, it will make you a better person because you learn from your mistakes. I will do everything in my power to prosper and become a contributing part of the UCF community.</p>

<p>the second versions of each response are MUCH better and will help u get in. Your essay in particular is good because it highlights how UCF can help YOU better yourself instead of boasting over how you’re the best student so you should go to the best college possible. but just keep in mind that schools like UCF who are looking to keep improving the quality of incoming students every single year focus a bit more on GPA and test scores than they do on essays and things like that, which is why the essay is actually optional. What are your stats if u dont mind sharing so i can give u a better indicator of ur chances</p>

<p>I don’t mind sharing, we are all here to give each other our opinions and I respect that. I’m transferring to UCF from a Community College in Florida with my AA Degree. I have a 3.65 Culmulative GPA from the Community College, as well as the previous College I went to for my AS Degree. In high school, I had a 3.73 overall GPA.</p>