Hey! help with essay

<p>Help is appreciated!</p>

<p>Why did you choose to apply to UCF?</p>

<pre><code>Every time i travel to Orlando I would gaze at the UCF campus where I would foresee the great opportunities and accomplishments the school would propose to me, and from there I knew i wanted to become a knight.
UCF offers one of the most excessive criminal justice programs and I believe with the academic curriculum I will be able to fulfill my goal of becoming a notable law enforcement officer to serve my community. With being the first individual from my fathers side of the family to attend college I conclude UCF will fill in that gap and open more doors to opportunities where I will succeed even further with knowledge and responsibility helping me transition into the real world. UCF is like a never ending book, there are always improvements opening up with the quality of education making other colleges inconsiderable.
Within these pages of UCF there are far more alternatives that grasp my attention such as the club organizations and events that are ministered by the student body. This is a great task force to help me direct at upholding social control that regulates individual and group behavior. As I see myself studying throughout the week I also see myself supporting the schools teams on the weekends to watch unfold even greater experiences that I would never imagine. Choosing UCF is a judgement I know i will never regret, not only is it a bright future ahead of me but i conclude that both I and the staff of the school would benefit from me attending.
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<p>looks good!</p>

<p>I PMed you.</p>

<p>thanks for the help! any more suggestions?</p>