Calling all creative writers! Essay critisim?

<p>As a transfer student of a very impacted major, I know the importance of the personal statements in showing the type of person you are. After reading some of the "essay tips" threads, I've realized, that a lot of people know what they are talking about!</p>

<p>I REALLY want a unique and thoughtful essay but don't really know how to go about it. I definitely wouldn't say my essays are "risky" but 1 of them is somewhat cliche, and 1 is very different (as in I doubt anybody else has written about this topic), however I feel on that essay I focus too much on the school I am trying to transfer to.</p>

<p>So, would anybody be willing to read/revise my essay? All tips help, some of you guys are great writers! Welp, I barely have a first draft of these essays so don't expect perfection! Thanks for the help guys!</p>

<p>sure. PM me. I"ll take a look.</p>

<p>thanks, I’ll PM one(;</p>

<p>sorry, but I need 3 more posts to PM you!</p>

<p>sorry, but I need 2 more posts to PM you!</p>

<p>so, I’ll be PMing you now.</p>

<p>Yes sure! PM me yours!</p>