Can a current student please glance over my essay? Feedback would be helpful!

Colleges and Universities A-Z University of California - Berkeley
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<p>So..I tend to get caught up in thinking about the topic and not actually writing it. But I did end up writing it today :) , even though I had been thinking about it since the summer.</p>

<p>If a current student would be kind enough to read response for #2 over for 2 things:</p>

<p>1) Does the thesis work?
2) Did I answer the prompt? I feel like I did but I got a little creative with it, and I'm not sure how much of that they will appreciate.</p>

<p>And beware, my writing is not very good ;)</p>

<p>Post here and I'll PM it to you.</p>

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<p>sure thing.</p>

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<p>^Thanks. just PMd it to you.</p>

<p>Anyone else?</p>

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<p>try it on me</p>

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<p>sent. 10char</p>

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<p>I can read it.</p>

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<p>^Thanks, do you go to Berkeley or UCLA?</p>

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<p>I sent it to you, snowflake. Check your messages</p>

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<p>i can read it</p>

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<p>Thanks, I’ll make some changes from the others’ helpful feedback and send it.</p>

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<p>I sent it- check your email, Yeeji.</p>

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<p>Just sent in app: thanks for everyone who read/commented on my personal statement. It was very helpful!</p>