Can anyone grade my essay please?

<p>Can someone grade my essay please? I need it so I can score my practice test. Thanks!</p>

<p>Prompt: Is honesty always the best policy?</p>

<p>While honesty is a fundamental virtue and does provide benefits for society, it is not always the best policy. It is truly a situational trait and can be seen as a two-sided street; that is to say, sometimes it is important to be honest while at other times honestyw ould be a less favorable option. Because of this, honesty is not always the best policy as there are times when secrecy and deception are better suited.</p>

<p>This policy of not upholding honesty in our society can be seen in the United State's recent capture of Osama Bin Laden. While this operature(?) was joyous for some, it called for some doubt as to whether Bin Laden's capture had actually occurred. The U.S. military and intelligence has kept the logistics and evidence of this case very secretive in what they maintain as "for the good of the country and the military". Despite our countries' freedom of expression, even the military, which is regarded as one of our main institutions, has deemed the necessity to keep various things private. Their secrecy shows that honesty is not always the best policy, especially if this would jeopardize the military or defense of the country. Even if the execution of Bin Laden was hypothetical as some believe, keeping the truth from the public has resulted in heightened morale, a stimulated economy, and increased support for the war on terror. These benefits have all resulted from the decision against honesty.</p>

<p>In the novel Of Mice and Men, George has no option to end his friend's life, Lennie, who has abnormally low intelligence, had accidently killed his farm owner's mistress and was about to be put to death violently. George, who was sensitive of Lennie's disability, decided it was in Lennie's best interest to kill him painlessly, or else he would suffer at the hands of the other farmers. Although George was dishonest and promised Lennie of all the things they'd do and how he'd have a great life, George secretly ended Lennie's life as painlessly as he could. George, although dishonest, had the best intentions for Lennie and acted without honesty so that Lennie would have the best outcome. This shows that honesty is not always the best policy as it is not always in a person's best interest.</p>

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<p>I started writing at like 20:30 remaining and went on a frantic rush at the end to finish it off and had no conclusion or third example.</p>

<p>Also, at the start of paragraph 3, will that disaster of grammar be a huge deduction of points? (like a score of 8 to a score of 7)</p>

<p>I gave this essay a score of 8 based on what I saw from other example essays, but what would you guys grade it as?</p>

<p>Thanks a ton for all the help!</p>

<p>Repetitive in places. Some of your idioms are non-standard and weird. Some of the words are made up. Words are misspelled. Honestly, this is a pretty poor essay in terms of mechanics and style.</p>

<p>Content is OK, but it doesn’t really seem very deep or convincing to me. I suppose when I read an essay on a philosophical question, I expect to see some reference to, well, philosophy. Ethicists have been asking this question for a long time.</p>

<p>If the maximum score is 8 and the categories are “Language” and “Content”, I’d give you 4/6 for an average of 5. Hopefully I’m a bigger jerk than the guys reading your essay when it’s the real thing.</p>

<p>Let’s see… These scores are completely hypothetical of course.
Reader 1: 4
Reader 2: 3
Essay Score: 7</p>

<p>It’s pretty short for a SAT essay… make it perhaps 1 or 2 more paragraphs longer? Try not to make words up either. “Operature” is not a word. I do agree that it is pretty repetitive, however, on my essay that I wrote for the March SAT, I repeated myself endless times and ended up with a 10, so who knows.</p>

<p>You also want to address the other point of view and refute it. In this essay, bring up why some people might say that honesty is the best policy and refute it with relevant evidence.</p>

<p>woot thanks guys!</p>