<p>I need a lot of help with my common app essay. I choose the topic with the place of contentment. The first essay I wrote about was my room but then I noticed I was coming off as lazy. For my second essay I think I found a better place that can make me sound a little more interesting. I choose to write about the NYC subway and I feel like I have good ideas, but my essay is choppy and I don't think it reveals enough about me. Can someone please read it, and help me fix this? Any advice would help!!!</p>
<p>Send it to me</p>
<p>I can give it a shot.</p>
<p>I would read it, too</p>
<p>I will read it, if you like.</p>