Can anyone read my CommonApp essay and critique it? <500 words

<p>Indicate a person who has had a significant influence on you, and describe that influence</p>

<p>I'll pm it. Reputable people only please. If possible no 09'ers.</p>

<p>I meant to say ~500 words. I'm editing it a bit and it seems it may make 600 words. Sorry for the inconvenience.</p>

<p>ok it ended up at 838..should i cut it down lol?</p>

<p>ill read it...just send me a pm</p>

<p>I'll read it if you read mine, though I am an '09er.</p>

<p>And I've already sent my applications, if you're worried about plagiarism.</p>

<p>just PM it over</p>