Can anyone review my Common App Personal Statement prompt #1? Pretty please?

<p>I'll have a surprise present for you if you choose to do so</p>

<p>I'd prefer for any editors to have a higher post count and to have been around a while.</p>

<p>Not sure if I match up with your preference but I’m willing :)</p>

<p>No offense but I’d rather have someone else proofread it. Thanks for the offer though! I’ll send it to you later if I change my mind</p>

<p>anyone? please?</p>

<p>bump. I’ll help with anyone else’s essay in return for help on mine</p>

<p>I can read it. I don’t have a high post count though, so send it to me only if you can’t find anyone else. But no, I have no intentions of stealing your work.</p>