Can somebody review my academic appeal letter please?

Subject: Request for Appeal of Disqualification

Dear Member of the Committee,

My name is _____. I am writing to request an appeal for the disqualification from _. The suspension was informed on 6/23/2017 as for the consequence of consecutive inadequate GPAs during the 2016-2017 academic year. I respectfully protest the result of the disqualification, based on the understandable reasons behind my academic failures. I would like to disclose these reasons and how I have overcame them. I believe my actions can prove my capability of performing well again from now on.

My psychological condition accounts mostly for my declined performance. I entered ____ as an international transfer student who barely knew anyone. There was a persistent feeling that I am an outsider and it keeps intensifying. At an extreme there were some occasions which I experienced anxiety for just going to the campus. My focus during lessons is also disturbed. In response to that, I decided to skip classes as a mean of escaping this daily mental challenge. It affected my daily life too, I sometimes sleep and eat indulgently, other time had minimal sleepiness and appetite. The intense distress and lack of energy has been distracting my studying, even though I truly am eager to learn inside.

Seeing myself failing in subjects that I know I could do well has created shame, therefore I further deserted myself to other people. My avoidant personality had displeased people around me. When this situation started to threaten my education opportunity here in ____, I realized that this a serious problem, and I am responsible to take action immediately to resolve the case.

Monitoring my mental health was my first step. I utilized school resources, such as the psychological advising service provided by ABC(advising center). Besides seeking help, I did my part in rationalizing my cognition in order to reconstruct my studying habits and my perception about the school. I opened up myself more. I have met new supportive friends in school from my country, I am able to express my difficulties more accurately through my native language, which was a good stepping stone to further localize myself into the college. There were already drastic improvements in my emotion, daily life habits and schoolwork management. I can confidently conclude that I am psychologically capable to handle future schoolwork as well as recover what I have been missing.

I learned that active participation and independent study do have a supplement effect on each other. Attending lectures not only grant us the important information from the professor, it furthermore makes us enthusiastic to the course topic. If I am granted the opportunity to continue studying, I will be attending each and every lectures to ensure that I am closely connected to the class. I will also utilize office hours and discussion sessions to express my difficulties and keeping a same pace to the class.

To compensate the failure from the pass year, I will be staying in school for the summer sessions this year and next year. I will gradually increase the credits I am taking each quarter. I do not expect the work to be easy, knowing that there are still many catch-up work on top of my regular schoolwork. To accomplish that, I will consistently monitor my mental stability and my industry. The next step is to consult the academic advising office about my recreated education plan. This allows me to preview difficulties ahead so that I will be well prepared.

I will not stop from here, I have received the lesson and I am a changed person. Having to study here in ____ is a golden opportunity, though it also comes with responsibilities. I earnestly hope that I have shown my dedication to improving myself and the situation. I believe I truly deserve an exemption from the policy to receive a lifting of my disqualification. If you have any inquires, please contact me by email: ___________ or phone: _________. Thank you for reconsidering.

Sincerely,

Me
(student number)

Could you tell me how you feel after reading this and how I should improve the letter. Thank you all so much.

I understand that the wording might be inaccurate or inappropriate, Im trying my very better as a foreign language speaker, it would be helpful if anyone can point out the weird wordings. Thanks

I think it’s way too long. What you really need to do is to tell them you are appealing the disqualification (what does this mean? are you suspended or being kicked out?). Then you tell them that you were diagnosed with depression or anxiety or whatever it was, and that you are now receiving medical help (if you are) and counseling for your condition. You now have a support system in place and have resolved to do better next semester, because you are ready for the rigors of college work. Then politely ask to be reinstated for a semester, on a probationary basis, and then if you improve significantly, you will request to be allowed to continue at the end of the semester.

I honestly don’t know if this will help, but you do need to try. And if you are studying a subject that is very competitive at your school, or one that you don’t have an aptitude for, you should consider changing majors.

Good luck!