Can someone critique a "first experience" essay?

[robotFOOD]

<p>thannnks! i appreciate it</p>

[thisSHHHisBANANAs]

<p>i will, PM me.</p>

[db06]

<p>i'll read, PM</p>

[subacalibo]

<p>i will too, you can pm me as well</p>

[dsmo]

<p>i will, pm me</p>

[yukster]

<p>Sure, I'll help.</p>

[goldentime]

<p>sure thing. just pm me :)</p>

[melt]

<p>why not? i'll help.</p>

[fae]

<p>yep i did the page 217 one</p>

[ddotdes]

<p>Sure. pm me</p>

[krishnasb]

<p>yeah im doing the 217 one also, so ill read it...just PM me.</p>

[eTHeReaLkEv]

<p>Yeah I'll read it too. pm me</p>

[theprincessa]

<p>yup yup! PM me</p>

[voodoovince]

<p>Sure, I'll review it for ya</p>

[Goldfish]

<p>PM me too.</p>

[handscoring]

<p>sure pm... i will break it down for you</p>

[eighteenforluck]

<p>Hey, I'm a Wharton freshman, feel free to pm me and I'll look it over...someone did the same for me last year, so I'd like to spread the Penn love =)</p>

[kristian_rj]

<p>I will if you want...</p>

[szeatam]

<p>PM me..btw how long this essay supposed to be??</p>

[lassy_vious]

<p>PM me! yeah... i'm also curious</p>