Can someone give me feedback on my essay on overcoming adversity?

<p>I have a really short essay(200 words) due Monday but I'm not a very strong writer so I'd really appreciate some feedback. Thanks!</p>

<p>Bump…please I would really appreciate some help</p>

<p>I’ll read it! can you read mine too? </p>

<p>@Banquo Thank you! I’d love to read yours, pm it to me:)</p>