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<p>prompt-analyze african actions and reactions in the response for the European Scramble for Africa.</p>

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<p>Thorughout history, many people respond different ways to different things for different reasons. Often times, when change is forced on a group of people they do not look kindly upon it. This would be the case for what the World considers the Scramble for Africa. According to the documents given, European powers gave the illusion of choice to the people and then backed that up with bullets when they resisted. In response the the European Colonization of Africa, the Native people feared the social problems that would face them along with the fear of foreign rule. This caused them to rely heavily on their religious faith and the belief that dying in battle would be better than becoming slaves. Due to the matriarchal set up of African Tribes, women had a larger role in determining their course of action than women in other European Countires had. </p>

<p>According to Document 1 (The Standard form signed by many African Rulers by The Royal Niger Company) and Document 2 (Ashanti Leader's response to a British Official) discuss how the British give the illusion that African Nations have a choice in this matter. After all, the British offer a contract to be signed by African Leaders which implies that Leaders may choose to accept or decline. After being presented with this dilema, most African Nations such as the Ashanti wished to remain independent and to preserve their relations with Europe.The African's felt like they were in control of their own fate due to the false illusion of free choice.The British obviously anticipated this resistance as they later used warfare to control Africa by force. </p>

<p>Accordint to Document 3 (Letter to Europe from the Leader of Ethiopia) and Document 8 (Account of the Maji Maji Rebellion in Germany from a German Officer) explain the role of religion in The Colonization of Africa. Due to the Berlin Conference, the Continent of Africa was being divided. Many felt like they had been saved in previous crises as a result of their god's doing. African Nations believed that they maintained their independence by being protected from the God's and felt invincible against European bullets. This could be attributed to one of the reasons why the African's chose to fight in the face of an almost certain death. Also the Ethiopian victory (doc. 5) gave African's a sense of hope in their quest to remain independent. The German's also used the religious practice of the African tribes as propaganda to motivate soldiers. Many military personnel believed that the African's strength of faith came from a form of voodoo or a spiritual water. This document is biased because the Germans were exploiting the practices of the African religions for their own purpose and self benefit.</p>

<p>According to Document 4 (by an African Veteran), Document 6 (Speech to Chiefs by the Queen Ashanti), Document 7 (letter to another African Leader by Samuel Maherero and Document 9 (African leaders response to a German Catholic Missionary). All of these documents depict the oppressive use of force on African Natives which sparked an African Rebellion. After African tribes turned down contracts, British stopped pretending to be nice and used guns on the people. Many people fought back in fear that they would be treated like slaves if colonized by Europe. Unlike trends accross the world during this time period, women convinced many male leaders that it would be almost dishonerable to let their King be taken without firing a single bullet. This was mainly due to the Matriarchal structure of Society that was formed in early African Societies. Bias is also prevalent in these documents also due to the fact that African's were crying out for help and were only using the facts that would support their cause. </p>

<p>African Nations responded to colonization efforts by holding on to their religious beliefs and through militaristic resistance. Many African Natives motivated themselves to fight by thinking that the only alternative would be slavery. Later in History, the dividing up of Africa during the Berlin Conference divided up many ethnic groups which would cause perpetual violance in Africa. Also European exploitation of resources left Africa dependant on European powers, very similar to Latin American and South American Countries. An additional document that would have been helpful is a response from African merchants that detailed the possible economic consequences of European Colonization.</p>

<p>Never, ever, ever start an essay with “Throughout history…”. Ever.</p>

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<p>Don’t use “according to document X” ever. Say something like "according to Louis XV, the king’s royal advisor during X event, “blahblahblah.” Then explain why he would feel this way. E.g. The nobility during this time period were very conservative and did not want to change the existing system and jeopardize their privileged position.</p>