can someone please help me edit my short answer essay?

<p>So I started writing my short response essay for the common app and I would really like it if some of your guys could read it and give me advice on what i should change or add. So just some editing or critiquing. Its only a rough draft. Thanks!</p>

<p>pm me, i’ll read it</p>

<p>I will like to read it too</p>

<p>Me too, pm me</p>

<p>I would also like to read and try to help if possible.</p>

<p>I can help if you still need.</p>