Can someone read my personal statement for uc's well the second.

<p>i have two but i dont know which is best suited for it can you read them and give me feedback and as well tell me which one is better thank you</p>

<p>Prompt: Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution, or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?</p>

<p>just message me thanks</p>

<p>ahh don’t post this online D: </p>

<p>it’s searchable! a few grammatical errors: prize, not price in the second response, content not contempt! As well as isn’t a really great way to start the last sentence… </p>

<p>I think I like the second one more!</p>

<p>was the second one story or how i love math a lot???</p>

<p>Email me the essay. I’ll give some feed backs</p>