Can someone read over my Extracurriculars Essay for the common app?

<p>I just finished writing this. I am not really sure what the essay should include.
I decided to write mine on volleyball. It probably isn't a good idea to post it on here, so let me know if you are willing to look over it. Any help is greatly appreciated!
I really want to make sure this is solid since I am applying to really competitive schools</p>