Can someone review my Common App essay?

[Dhruv97]

<p>I know it needs a lot of work still and it lacks a conclusion. Helpful criticism will be appreciated. </p>

[leglariat]

<p>Yeah, okay. You don’t necessarily need a conclusion paragraph set aside, by the way.</p>

[obsessedcornell1]

<p>Sure, send it over.</p>

[thekoolkid]

<p>PM me</p>