<p>Hi!
I'm tutoring a student now, and I just wanted to have you folks to score this essay. This will help me to see if my judgment is too critical (which is 99% the case), or I'm being lenient.</p>
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<p>Prompt: Do people achieve more success by cooperation than by competition?</p>
<p>Essay:
Key to group work is cooperation. In school, there's always group work to be done in every classes. Teachers assign us to be in groups so we would get our work done faster by cooperating, but that doesn't always work out. In most cases, the "smartest" person end up doing all the work while others languidly watch the time go. Cooperation is very hard to be achieved. Competition can be more successful than cooperation.
Cooperation, if reached, can certainly bring out the best outcome. People say that two brain's brower than one, but it's just as easy to have a discord among the members. With more people to work with, it's easy to digress from the topic. When all the work is eventually placed upon one person, that person is going to get exasperated and more conflicts will result. When nobody's happy to work with each other, nothing's going to happen. It might produce worse results than it would've have if one worked alone.
Competition, on the other hand, is really a fight against oneself rather than against other people. It's matter of endurance and the amount of will one is willing to put into the work. One tests to see how much one can pursue twoards the winning position. With competition, there's a definite goal settled: to be the first place. It may not always bring out the best in oneself if one get obsessed over the first place, but it certainly gets one motivated to do best. From this, best outcomes may occur.
Cooperation can result fights among the groups over even a trivial matter. Disputes happen easily and often unfair things happen. However, competition can get oneself motivated to do the absolute best because it's beneficial to oneself and nobody else.</p>