Can you please grade my essay?

[jkjeremy]

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So, I should use personal examples?</p>

<p>Hang on. I thought that using “I” was looked down upon?</p>

<p>I don’t even know anymore

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<ol>
<li><p>Forget the word “examples.” It’s killing you. </p></li>
<li><p>There’s nothing wrong with writing about your personal OBSERVATIONS. However, writing about Aunt Jane is generally a last resort.</p></li>
<li><p>“I” isn’t optimal for academic writing.</p></li>
<li><p>The entire process is baffling, mostly because few of you have been taught what writing really is let alone how to do it.</p></li>
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[jkjeremy]

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Thank you, it means a lot. I love writing, and I love helping others with their writing. I have one piece written, it’s not really an essay, more like a record of my memories. I could send you that(?).

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<p>Of course. Send me anything you’d like.</p>

[TeamRocketGrunt]

<p>Hm. Alright.
jkjeremy, I read that you can present a different point of view on the issue; for this issue, could I say that it may be distracting for some and helpful for others? I could use myself and a friend to present the opposing sides. I like to work without distractions, but some of my friends can’t function without them.</p>

[jkjeremy]

<p>

I read that you can present a different point of view on the issue; for this issue, could I say that it may be distracting for some and helpful for others? I could use myself and a friend to present the opposing sides. I like to work without distractions, but some of my friends can’t function without them.

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<p>I advise my students to answer the question. (What a concept.) Generally, these prompts are “yes/no” propositions.</p>

<p>You can spend a bit of time discussing alternative viewpoints but only with the purpose of furthering your OWN argument.</p>

<p>Don’t write about your LIFE. Present your views on the issue.</p>

<p>There’s a difference.</p>