<p>I was hoping to apply to Colgate for early decision and Iknow that I have little time left So I was hoping you guys can give me a commnt on my supplement essay. The question says"Please tell us about yourself, how you plan to share your perspective with the Colgate Community, and what you hope to learn from other members of the community."</p>
<p>My response is </p>
<p>The quest to find ones self is very daunting. Nonetheless everyone finds himself. Eventually. I am Abeneazer Z Chafamo. One word to describe me would be a man of principles. That is actually three words but the point is I my life revolves around those principles that I have set for myself. There is no certain limit that I want to achieve in my life but I want to bring some kind of change to this world. I wisht to leave this world slightly better than it had been. I would say a peculiar about me is that I usually hold my own view or perspective on everything, no matter how trivial it be. Everything and I mean EVERYTHING I perceive, I will try and evaluate and posses an opinion on that matter.</p>
<p>My perspectives are the sum totals of my experiences and knowledge. Thus, I want to exchange my views with others. And I believe that Colgate provides the most suited environment for this by encouraging learning not only from the teachers but also among the students themselves.</p>
<p>Iknow it is bad so if you can suggest specific additions or removals to this essay I would really appreciate it.</p>