College Admission Application Essay?

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<p>I started my college application essay and i really need someones opinion. i need to know if I'm on the right path and some tips would be helpful.... thanks!</p>

<p>Moving can impact you in many ways, whether it may be good or bad. In the beginning, moving had a negative impact on me. I moved from Connecticut to South Carolina half way through high school. This had a huge impact on not only my social life, but my education as well. It was tremendously difficult to concentrate on school knowing that I wouldn’t be enjoying my last two years of high school as much as my friends back home would. As you can see from my transcript, my grades junior year slipped. I was caught up in trying to regain my social life and adapt to the “southern lifestyle”. Half way through second semester of my junior year I realized that my education is more important than trying to keep up with my new friends. Being upset about not living in my home state with my friends and family isn’t going to get me back there. Once I realized that, I immediately picked myself up and have been nothing but determined to get my grades back on track. Moving has forced me to adapt to different situations and thus made me a stronger and more flexible person. I have pushed past the weakest point in my life and am now on a one way path towards excellence. “Sometimes life is about the ability to believe in where you are going, even when you’re not sure what lies ahead.” Anytime I start to question myself as to if I’m going to earn a successful future, I think of that quote. This experience has changed my attitude towards completely. Moving states has shaped me into a well-rounded person.</p>

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<p>Please read the warnings and suggestions posted to the threads pinned to the top about how it is a bad idea to put your essay online.</p>

<p>It’s either very early or very late? To get appropriate feedback, it helps to provide the prompt and the college or and idea of the level of the college so people have an idea of how good it has to be.</p>

<p>Try to stay away from generic sentences like your first sentence. one way path towards excellence. “Sometimes life is about the ability to believe in where you are going, Moving states has shaped me into a well-rounded person. </p>

<p>Try to replace that stuff with something personal and meaningful.</p>