<p>Hi CC,
Can someone please look over my essay and edit it
Christmas carols are blaring in my house and everywhere I look, I see either green or red, and several statues of Santa Clause, as well as a six foot Christmas Tree. Although she did not think I would be interested, I sat on the carpet creating airplanes, cars and rocket ships for nine hours. That was the beginning of my love affair with engineering, design and building.
Soon clocks, motors, even new bicycles were not safe from my screwdriver or pliers, much to the consternation of my mother. My dad, a builder by avocation, was thrilled when I asked to help him and demanded an explanation of how everything worked as we repaired the house and added on to our summer camp. My father taught me many skills, how to build walls, plumb a bathroom, wire a house, lay hardwood floors, install windows and add cedar siding. The exhilarating rush I received while operating those tools were one that I would never forget, but the care I learned in planning and executing each step for highest quality was especially important.
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As the beneficiary of one man's creative skills, I know what engineering can accomplish. The ability to examine a problem like broken bones, create a new vision and solve the problem for people is the inspiration for my applying to Engineering School. My faith and commitment to serve people motivates this drive. I want to use my insatiable desire to learn and create in order to advance technology for the benefit of others. The field of engineering is leading our society into more exciting developments than ever before, and I seek to use my leadership skills within this arena.</p>
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<p>I am applying to the engineering programs in schools such as Stony, RIT, NYIT, Poly-NYU, Hofstra, and Manhattan College</p>