<p>This is for my UC application, I already submitted it so suggestions won't really help, I can take constructive criticism though. I really just want you to tell me if it is going to be a plus, neutral, or negative for my college application. Maybe rate it on a 1-10 scale? Thanks</p>
<p>here it is: </p>
<p>My eyes shot open and I looked around my bedroom engulfed in pitch blackness. Once again I was awakened by my father's work alarm, lamentably set for four in the morning. Right on schedule I could hear scratching at my bedroom door. That would be Buckwheat, one of six cats roaming about the house, wanting to come into my room. An environment steeped in hard-working people, money scarcity, and a multitude of cats is what I grew up in. The wealth in my family can more accurately be measured in laughs and elbow grease than in dollar bills. While I am undoubtedly content with my modest upbringings, I do feel ambitious in wanting to better myself by being the first person in my family to achieve a college degree.</p>
<p>Growing up in the situation of money woes regardless of how passionately hard working my parents are has made me see college as a necessary goal. "I'm sorry girls but this year isn't going to be a good Christmas, we just can't afford it," has become a recurring apology delivered by my father come December. Even though my father works from four in the morning, through his lunch hour, and even after his expected work hours, a luxurious Christmas is still far beyond my family's monetary grasp. The fact that I would not be met by a barricade of presents come Christmas did not upset me; no, what did was the fact that no matter how hard working my father is, no matter how many extra hours he works, it never seems to be enough. With my father as my role model I have grown up with the same assiduous spirit, though instead of channeling that zeal into work, I have directed my efforts towards school. I feel that with a college degree to my name, I can bridge the gap between tremendous effort and success.</p>
<p>Anticipating being the first in my family to graduate from a four year University is as frightening as it is exhilarating. Aside from college being a vehicle for me to grow intellectually and independently, I want to set a precedent for my younger siblings. I would like to set a new tradition for the Robbins Family, a tradition of higher education and the potential for prosperity. While not being able to ask older siblings or family members about their experiences in college, I have realized that there are advantages to being the first. Without any example to follow, there are no expectations or limitations for me, so I can form my own goals and standards. Being the one to set the foundation, I am free to become whoever I want to be, without any preconceived notions.</p>
<p>Rather than begrudging my family for our low income, instead I believe that I have grown up as an appreciative and hardworking person because of it. Not being surrounded by money has helped me grow up to be a humble person, and has shown me the merit of working to achieve my goals. Growing up with minimums has allowed me to dream without limit. I have always had high ambitions, and growing with my family has given me the necessary virtues, values, and vigor to achieve those goals.</p>