Comments and Suggestions on 2 Essays

<p>I wrote two essays for a scholarships and I need help to see if I am on the right track or if there is anything I should change. </p>

<p>If anyone can help me out please email me or send me your email. </p>

<p>My email is thomasle27 at gmail dot com or message me on here.</p>

<p>The two essay topics are:</p>

<p>Essay 1:
In 500 words or less, please describe your short-term and long-term personal and education/career goals and what has helped to shape your goals. What specific steps will you take to reach your personal/education/career goals?</p>

<p>Essay 2:
In 500 words or less, please describe how you plan to give back to your community and help fulfill the needs of your community after you've completed your education. How would your plan impact not only your immediate community, but also a broader one?</p>

<p><a href="mailto:15321956075@163.com">15321956075@163.com</a> I will help you!
P.S. Can you read my UIUC essay?</p>

<p>I can do that. Shoot me an email with your username and essay and I will send you mine.</p>