Common App Essay #1! Please Help

Hi guys
I wrote my essay on having two homes, one where I live now and one in Taiwan due to my parent’s divorce. I was wondering if that was too cliche? Would someone be able to help revise my essay please?

its actually a good topic - you can reveal a lot about yourself as you compare the 2 environments, cultures and how it gives you perspective. just don’t let it become too artificial. be honest about revealing what you actually learnt. don’t make stuff up.

There’s a thread about topics that are too cliche somewhere here, and I don’t think yours is too artificial either. However, any topic can be good as long as the essay is well-executed, so I think your focus should be more on the quality of your essay than the topic.

It’s not topics that are cliché, it’s the essays themselves.

Write a strong essay that shows some personal growth. But do it soon please.

Would any of you guys be willing to go over it and give feedback please?

@collegegirl8898 Ask @OnMyWay2013 to review it for you . He’s really helpful and honest

Hi! I could definitely review for you. I’m also a senior though, so it wouldn’t be as good as asking an English teacher per say, but I could definitely help with grammar and can tell you how it sounds from an outsider’s POV. I’ve also finished all of my essays with extensive proofreading so it wouldn’t be too hard for me.